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 Post subject: Mario Bros. Begin - OLD Unfinished Origin Story
PostPosted: Mon May 16, 2016 3:29 am 
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Most of you may not know this, but I started writing an origin story of the Mario Brothers, if they did spend their lives growing up in the Mushroom Kingdom before moving to Brooklyn. It would answer questions like, what was Bowser like before, how did Peach become ruler after her father's off screen appearance in the games, how did Mario and Luigi get so good at combat and parkour? And the story itself will have mysteries on its own, like who is Morton, who is Kerog, who is Kara, what is the Marauder's Spirit, and what are the fates of our characters gonna become?

The story can be found here:
http://stupidmariobrosfansite.freeforum ... t6168.html
It was written on the Richalvarez Fan Forums where the first two seasons Super Mario NUMB3RS originated from.

I wrote 9 chapters of the story and did get over halfway to finishing season one. And while I have written some bits of Chapter 10 "Spear", there's really nothing to show. But later chapters would have dived deeper into King Toadstool's journey to gain full redemption, while also having heart problems. Kerog is found out to have a spirit of the dark prophecy inside of him that Staritas tried to stop. Luigi and Peach have a romance that blooms between them. Wario makes a brief appearance as an episode antagonist. There would have been a villainy society that acts as an opposing force known as the Kam Society, what would have been runned by villainous characters we met before, as well as a possible appearance of Kamek himself. And Lakitus would have been explored while adapting this story from the comics, very loosely: http://www.mariowiki.com/Cloud_Burst

The story was planned to have probably 6 seasons, each being 15 episodes long. Or 15 chapters, however you like to call it. However the stories themselves were too long and I couldn't focus on it while I was in high school. And now being an adult, I have way less time than usual and I don't plan to resurrect or reboot the story.
And taking away the fact that the writing is outdated with lots of grammar errors, the story itself is a straight up rip off of Smallville. Seriously, if you watch the first season of Smallville, you can pin point which chapters tried to be like the Smallville episodes. The nuclear explosion is just like the meteor shower in Smallville. There was an episode where four students rivalled to be class president, there was an episode where Lex Luthor gets beaten up after an adultery breakout, there is an episode where the students go on a field trip and get stuck in a plant where a mysterious level exist that King Toadstool / Lex Luthor had no idea about, there was an old lady who could prospect the future while another elderly gains his/her youth to continue their murder spree, and a high school football tradition where a freshmen gets hang up as a prank. Heck you can pretty much make it a copy and paste between the two origin stories. And while I did try to throw original elements in or have some original ideas like seeing Bow get turned into a Boo, there's a huge lack of originality. And truth be told, the story is way too dark and grottiest than it should have been. Though the dark approach was necessary to develop the characters. Giving Mario and Luigi the title of being heroes, having Kerog and Kara go on edge at times, King Toadstool seeking redemption, and Peach wanting to make the kingdom a better place.

So while I am sad that this story did not continue on to be something unique, it was a pleasant writing exercise. Would I ever created something like this again? Maybe in another medium outside of literature, but there's no guarantee since I can't do animations and live action is too ambitious.

Here's a character status I came up with years ago that would have acted as a Wikia:

Spoiler:
Main Characters

Mario
- Male Human
- Appeared in 15/15 Episodes
- Older Twin Brother of Luigi
- Nuclear Affected (unknown mutation)
- Became a Marauder Spirit
- Student at Vista Hills High
- Alive
- More Info: http://www.mariowiki.com/Mario

Luigi
- Male Human
- Appeared in 15/15 Episodes
- Younger Twin Brother of Mario
- Nuclear Affected (unknown mutation)
- Student at Vista Hills High
- Alive
- More Info: http://www.mariowiki.com/Luigi

Kerog
- Male Koopa
- Appeared in 15/15 Episodes
- Played Football for the Vista Hills Marauders
- Became the vessel for Morton after surviving the nuclear explosion
- Student at Vista Hills High
- Alive (Body Being Possessed by Morton)

Kara
- Female Koopa
- Appeared in 14/15 Episodes (excluded in 7; Prospect)
- One of the few discoverers of the nuclear explosions' aftermath
- Became a vessel for Bela (in Episode 10)
- Student at Vista Hills High
- Alive (In the Mushroom Kingdom's ER injured)

Peach Toadstool
- Female Human
- Appeared in 13/15 Episodes (excluded in 4; Freshmen, 13; Injustice)
- The princess of the Mushroom Kingdom
- Daughter of Richard and Rose Toadstool
- Nuclear Affected (unknown mutation)
- Alive (captured by Morton)
- More Info: http://www.mariowiki.com/Peach

Richard Toadstool
- Male Human
- Appeared in 12/15 Episodes (excluded in 4; Freshmen, 7; Prospect, 12; Wario)
- Former Ruler of the Mushroom Kingdom
- Father of Peach and husband of Rose
- Deceased (Heart Attack in Episode 15)
- More Info: http://www.mariowiki.com/King_Toadstool


Minor Characters:

Commander
- Male Toad
- Appeared in 6/15 Episodes (5, 6, 8, 9, 12, 15)
- The Commander of the Mushroom Kingdom's military
- Comatose (knocked out by Morton)

Wooster
- Male Toad
- Appeared in 5/15 Episodes (6, 7, 9, 11, 13)
- Former Chief Advisor of Richard Toadstool (got fired)
- Alive
- More Info: http://www.mariowiki.com/Wooster

Tim/Eugene Snyder
- Male Toad
- Appeared in 4/15 Episodes (4, 6, 9, 13)
- Childhood Friend of Richard Toadstool
- Member of the Kam society
- Former Vista Hills High Principal
- Alive

Anthony
- Male Human
- Appeared in 4/15 Episodes (3, 9, 11, 13)
- Member of the Kam society
- Half the side of his face, shoulder, and armed burned (by Velma in Episode 3)
- Alive

Troy
- Male Toad
- Appeared in 4/15 Episodes (4, 5, 8, 14)
- Played Football for the Vista Hills Marauders
- Student at Vista Hills High
- Alive

Sean
- Male Human
- Appeared in 4/15 Episodes (4, 5, 8, 14)
- Played Football for the Vista Hills Marauders
- Student at Vista Hills High
- Alive

Morton
- Male SuperKoopa
- Appeared in 3/15 Episodes (7; Prospect, 14; Beast, 15; Vessel)
- Caused the nuclear explosion and used Kerog as his vessel
- Used Kerog as a vessel in Episodes 14 and 15
- The Main Antagonist of Season 1
- Disabled supernatural abilities due to Richard using the Spear against him
- Has a possibility of being Bowser in the future but is unconfirmed
- Alive (Using Kerog as a vessel)

Bill
- Male Koopa
- Appeared in 3/15 Episodes (9; Richard, 11; Telekinetic, 13; Injustice)
- Son of Joe
- Member of the Kam society
- Nuclear Affected (Teleport Himself and anything he wants with him)
- Comatose (knocked out by Kara)

Steve
- Male Human
- Appeared in 2/15 Episodes (9; Richard, 13; Injustice)
- Member of the Kam society
- Alive

Golddess
- Male Lakitu
- Appeared in 2/15 Episodes (11; Telekinetic, 13; Injustice)
- Leader of the Lakitu Squad
- Gave Daniel and Michael their telekinesis power
- Alive

Rose Toadstool
- Female Human
- Appeared in 2/15 Episodes (1; Pilot, 14; Beast (hallucination))
- Wife of Richard Toadstool and mother of Peach Toadstool
- Deceased (killed by the nuclear explosion in Episode 1)

Wario
- Male human
- Appeared in 2/15 Episodes (1; Pilot, 12; Wario)
- Cousin of Mario and Luigi
- Nuclear Affected (possess strength)
- Alive (captivity in the Mushroom Kingdom Prison)
- More Info: http://www.mariowiki.com/Wario

Allen
- Male Koopa
- Appeared in 2/15 Episodes (4; Freshmen, 5; Prey)
- Played Football for the Vista Hills Marauders
- Student at Vista Hills High
- Deceased (killed by Larry in Episode 5)

Violet
- Female Human
- Appeared in 1/15 Episodes (3; Staritas)
- Last surviving member of Staritas
- Nuclear Affected (Burned marks telepathically)
- Deceased (killed by Anthony in Episode 3)

Velma
- Female Human
- Appeared in 1/15 Episodes (7; Prospect)
- Blind
- Nuclear Affected (foresee the future by touching a person)
- Deceased (killed by Morton's spirit inside of Kerog in Episode 7)

Pearl
- Female Toad
- Appeared in 1/15 Episodes (7; Prospect)
- Serial Killer
- Nuclear Affected (aged young)
- Deceased (killed accidentally by her own knife in Episode 7)

Bela
- Female Magikoopa
- Appeared in 1/15 Episodes (10; Spear)
- Rebelled against Morton
- Used Kara as a vessel
- Deceased (First killed by Morton, then put to rest by Mario)

Larry
- Male Toad
- Appeared in 1/15 Episodes (5; Prey)
- Former Guard of the Mushroom Kingdom
- Nuclear Affected (crave for raw meat of humans, toads, or koopas)
- Deceased (killed by Kerog in Episode 5)

Erik
- Male Human
- Appeared in 1/15 Episodes (8; Plant)
- Best Friend to Kerog's father
- Divorced, with one son
- Nuclear Affected on Level 4 of the new plant (jitter and build up rage and strength)
- Deceased (killed by his own mutation)

Dean
- Male human
- Appeared in 1/15 Episodes (9; Richard)
- Former Husband of Charlotte
- Former Staritas Member
- Former Janitor of the Mushroom Kingdom
- Nuclear Affected (reincarnation)
- Deceased (First killed by Charlotte, and last killed by Anthony)

Charlotte
- Female Human
- Appeared in 1/15 Episodes (9; Richard)
- Former Wife of Dean
- Deceased (suicide)

Joe
- Male koopa
- Appeared in 1/15 Episodes (9; Richard)
- Father of Bill
- Member of the Kam society
- Deceased (killed under King Toadstool's law against Staritas)

King Boo
- Male Boo (superior to become king)
- Appeared in 1/15 Episodes (2; Quest)
- King Among Boos in the Mushroom Country
- Blue tongue and reddish eyes
- Alive (forced to leave my Tina Bow's touch)
- More Info: http://www.mariowiki.com/King_Boo

Tina Bow
- Female Toad (formerly), Green Female Boo
- Appeared in 1/15 Episodes (2; Quest)
- Nuclear Affected (bypassed King Boo's brainwashing liquid having her own mind)
- Deceased (killed by King Boo), but alive as a Boo
- More Info: http://www.mariowiki.com/Lady_Bow

Unnamed Vista Hills High Coach
- Male Toad
- Appeared in 1/15 Episodes (4; Freshmen)
- Former Marauder's Coach
- Fired for supporting the Marauder Spirit Tradition
- Alive

Jason
- Male human
- Appeared in 1/15 Episodes (4; Freshmen)
- Nuclear Affected (fire breathing and reincarnation)
- Former Student at Vista Hills High
- Became a Marauder Spirit
- Alive (captivity by the Mushroom Kingdom)

Daniel
- Male Human
- Appeared in 1/15 Episodes (11; Telekinetic)
- Orphan abused by the Lakitu
- The Power of Telekinesis not caused by the nuclear explosion
- Former member of the Lakitu Squad
- Alive

Michael
- Male Koopa
- Appeared in 1/15 Episodes (11; Telekinetic)
- Orphan abused by the Lakitu
- The Power of Telekinesis not caused by the nuclear explosion
- Member of the Lakitu Squad
- Lives on obedience
- Alive

Pete
- Male Human
- Appeared in 1/15 Episodes (6; Fade)
- Brother of Susan
- Student at Vista Hills High
- Alive (serving nine months in prison)

Megan
- Female Human
- Appeared in 1/15 Episodes (6; Fade)
- Student at Vista Hills High
- Comatose (attacked by Pete in Episode 6)

Susan
- Female Human
- Appeared in 1/15 Episodes (6; Fade)
- Sister of Pete
- Student at Vista Hills High
- Alive

Susan's unnamed mother
- Female Human
- Appeared in 1/15 Episodes (6; Fade)
- Mother of Susan and Pete
- Alive

Terry
- Male Toad
- Exchange Student at Vista Hills High
- Appeared in 1/15 Episodes (6; Fade)
- Elected Class President of Vista Hills High
- Alive

Dominic
- Male Toad
- Appeared in 1/15 Episodes (7; Prospect)
- Deceased (killed by Pearl in Episode 7)

Mario and Luigi's Parents (Mom and Dad)
- Humans
- Appeared in 1/15 Episodes (1; Pilot)
- Members of Staritas
- Parents of Mario and Luigi
- Deceased (killed under King Toadstool's law against Staritas)

Waluigi
- Male human
- Appeared in 1/15 Episodes (1; Pilot)
- Nuclear Affected (Unknown mutation)
- Last known alive, but location unknown
- More Info: http://www.mariowiki.com/Waluigi




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